I just don't know what is wrong with my picture.
So like, please help?

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[Sycra]

I did a quick paintover to show some areas you could improve on. Important areas are things like the face being in 3/4 but the eyes being kind of facing forward, the body is too small for her head, and the ear needs more care.

I made another try at the portrait thing.

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So I (personally think) that I more or less managed to improve thanks to the critique from Sycra (a paint-over? That's too awesome! Please let me know if there's some kind of donate-button. I did not find one myself, but I am lazy/stupid).

I would love to hear what you guys think!

you did a spectacular job

you did a spectacular job

Thank you so much!

Though it warms my heart to hear you say such things, it would warm my heart even more if you could completely trash my painting instead.

I really love the eyes and mouth.=) Charming!^_^ Also, you did a great job with the hair.) The only thing I can mention is that neck looks too thick, especially for woman.

[Ambiguity]

+1 to everything Minako said, and also her left eyebrow(on the right side of the painting) is a tad too far in IMO.

[Waveloop]

Good Job with the hair... and the face in general... but I get a creepy feeling when I look at the portraid, it's like the body is facing away, and the head is twisted 180 towards the viewer... It's a bit unsettling... Mostly the neck is to thick, and the muscles anatomy is a bit strange...
Keep it up

Thanks for all the tips!

I tried to correct everything, but the body was too hard for me so i tried to draw attention from it with a black border.

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[Waveloop]

It´s a lot better... I would just do a couple of things... does not seem to be aliened with the neck... I would move the head a littel to the left... and then define a bit more the neck muscles.

but it's a lot better now

cheers

[Sycra]

Hey, your recent one is way better! It looks really nice. There are just a few points I'd point out to you. One is the neck, as has been mentioned already. The other is to make sure that the eyeball sits inside the eye socket and the eyelids wrap around it. Finally, the angle of the shirt texture makes the body look really flat. Remember the form of the ribcage, how it goes outward, not just down, and include that information in your pictures.

Otherwise, great work. I really like it a lot.

love the second one, you're awsome

I'm really sorry I didn't respond to Sycra and the others, but I was sure this thread was dead. Won't make that mistake again (turned on notifications).
Thank you so much for the criticism, it really helps! Especially the paint-over, now I (hopefully) know how to handle the eye thing.

I've actually managed to paint something again (gasp) and I would appreciate any eventual criticism.

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2012nov1

OMG THIS IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU REALLY OUT DID YOURSELF. I CAN"T PROVIDE CRITICISM BECAUSE YOUR ON A WHOLE OTHER LEVEL

No, dont change anything you just need loving support. its a good style! Dont worry about proportions or technique, style is woeth more.

a few minor points i see...

- where her shoulders connect to the dress, it seems as if the detail was done so, that there is a quite noticable jump in the outline of the upper arm.

- her neck is against the very light background and i think should have a crisper outline (i realize the style is sort of hazy on purpose, but still, thats my opinion)

- lastly her right fore-arm seems to have a concave curvature, which if not straight, should be convex imo


but a very nice effort overall

[Ambiguity]

I find it odd that her left eyebrow(our right) doesn't seem to be attached to her glabella(the triangular shape that attaches the nose to the forehead) like the right one.

Thank you for the critique everyone!

I tried to do some quick adjustments to the drawing, according to your advice:

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YAY PAINTING

Sorry 4 bringin' dis up... Truly I am... but would I b wrong 2 address u as "Derpy Hooves" right now?

Sorry 4 bringin' dis up... Truly I am... but would I b wrong 2 address u as "Derpy Hooves" right now?

I'd be honored.=P

I've got a new one for you guys! =)

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hey there.
first of all, nice idea. the face of the girl is also looking good. the use of colours isn't bad either.
what bothers me the most right now is that the figure itself however is lacking in posture and figure.

the head seems to be missing a bit in the back and the figure is leaning allot forward. to the viewers left.

hey there.
first of all, nice idea. the face of the girl is also looking good. the use of colours isn't bad either.
what bothers me the most right now is that the figure itself however is lacking in posture and figure.

the head seems to be missing a bit in the back and the figure is leaning allot forward. to the viewers left.

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I tried to adress some of the problems (head, lean) with liquify and painting over.

In retrospect, the pose makes no sense at all. I don't think it's worth it to redo, well basically everything.

Thank you for your critique , I think I'm going to do some gesture studies in the near future.

Nice start on your last one, but lighting is off and i think you might need to work on overall anatomy and pose before going into too much painting. Your figure looks a bit flat so keep on working on forms and 3d-shapes by lighting and good linework.