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Postby Kricket » Sat Jan 07, 2012 3:49 am

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Subject title: She-Hulk

This is part of a She-Hulk pic I drew last week, full thing here on my DA. What can I say, I love the fit ladies. Anyway, constructive criticism appreciated on every aspect.

Looking at it now I think the left shoulder looks pulled out of its socket. I also don't like the right forearm or bicep. Could have used a stronger shadow on the ground. Gaussian Blur is my crutch.

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Postby Cartesian Theater » Sat Jan 07, 2012 6:00 am

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I really like this piece! The colors and lighting are really fun, and the proportion is pretty good except for what you mentioned with the arm. The only thing I wonder is why the hair is so much more messy than the rest of the piece. Everything else is clean lines, and the hair has bits of random colors hanging off the sides. I think it would also look pretty cool if you made the lighting a bit less flat, rather than the straight white line - since she has so much texture to her hair, the light wouldn't be so flat across. The white dots on the breasts are also a bit weird and not really necessary. I know it might just be a stylized thing, but they're not even placed where the light would naturally make a spot like that, so it's a bit distracting. Anyway, awesome style and I look forward to seeing more!

 

Postby Skittlemonster » Sat Jan 07, 2012 7:35 am

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This is really nice, I'm loving the shading style on the boots! Other than the shoulder socket issue you mentioned the only thing that really stands out to me about this piece is the excessive use of Gaussian blur, especially on her legs for some reason. I think a more crisp shading style would work out better for this!

Great job :D keep up the nice work!

 

Postby Zargogo » Sat Jan 07, 2012 11:05 am

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How long did this piece take you to do? It looks very well polished.

P.S. She-hulk is a pornstar apparently :D

 

Postby Shoethief » Sat Jan 07, 2012 12:18 pm

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Zargogo wrote:How long did this piece take you to do? It looks very well polished.

P.S. She-hulk is a pornstar apparently :D

Since when!? Oh and great work on She-Hulk lol :D I agree the left shoulder looks a bit odd though.

 

Postby Sycra » Sat Jan 07, 2012 7:45 pm

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Hey man, your pic looks great. Something I could comment on though, is that the greenish rim light on her is somewhat strange and distracting to me, because the light isn't changing color depending on what it's hitting. For example, it should look different on the white of the boots, compared to the green of the skin, because the color of something is the light+the local color, not the light just by itself. But other than that, it's great!

 

Postby Kricket » Sat Jan 07, 2012 8:21 pm

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Cartesian Theater wrote:The only thing I wonder is why the hair is so much more messy than the rest of the piece. Everything else is clean lines, and the hair has bits of random colors hanging off the sides. I think it would also look pretty cool if you made the lighting a bit less flat, rather than the straight white line - since she has so much texture to her hair, the light wouldn't be so flat across. The white dots on the breasts are also a bit weird and not really necessary. I know it might just be a stylized thing, but they're not even placed where the light would naturally make a spot like that, so it's a bit distracting. Anyway, awesome style and I look forward to seeing more!

Y'know, I got caught up in doing the hair and those dots "by the number". For hair, do this. Rounded surface - add specular dots. Thanks for pointing that out to me, I never would have realized I was doing that.

Skittlemonster wrote:This is really nice, I'm loving the shading style on the boots! Other than the shoulder socket issue you mentioned the only thing that really stands out to me about this piece is the excessive use of Gaussian blur, especially on her legs for some reason. I think a more crisp shading style would work out better for this!

The muscles in the legs were originally more defined but she looked a bit too ripped so I blurred it to tone it down. I'll try to find a balance in the future.

Zargogo wrote:How long did this piece take you to do? It looks very well polished.

On and off, about a week.

Shoethief wrote:Oh and great work on She-Hulk lol :D

Thanks!

Sycra wrote:Hey man, your pic looks great. Something I could comment on though, is that the greenish rim light on her is somewhat strange and distracting to me, because the light isn't changing color depending on what it's hitting. For example, it should look different on the white of the boots, compared to the green of the skin, because the color of something is the light+the local color, not the light just by itself. But other than that, it's great!

That's a great suggestion, I'll do that, thanks!

 

Postby samuri » Sat Jan 07, 2012 11:40 pm

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I really like this, the colours are great.
If I had any critical comments it'd be her hips are very wide, wider than I'd expect for an athletic build.
Also, she almost looks like she has a doodah ;-)

 

Postby sahrab » Sun Jan 08, 2012 4:18 pm

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i like her look and pose very nice !

 

Postby Roger » Sun Jan 08, 2012 9:46 pm

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I don't know if this has been said already, but her right arm, the bicep muscle, doesn't look right at all. It looks like it has shrunk.
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