I feel like something is wrong but I cant pinpoint it. Is it the composition? Does it look too messy?

I like it actually. I wish there were a few areas that were refined though to add interest to otherwise pretty messy marks. I mean, not really messy in a bad way but yeah it's really loose all over.

Values? You have all about the same value and then the black. It seems a bit off balance. Maybe adding more variation or contrast and big shapes of value could help.

I like it actually. I wish there were a few areas that were refined though to add interest to otherwise pretty messy marks. I mean, not really messy in a bad way but yeah it's really loose all over.

thanks! yeah i'll have it rendered more later on. Im concerned it might look overdone oh well

Values? You have all about the same value and then the black. It seems a bit off balance. Maybe adding more variation or contrast and big shapes of value could help.

I figured much. The focal point isnt clear or maybe theres too many focal points. I'll work through it.