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Postby Nipponkage » Fri Apr 12, 2013 11:53 am

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Subject title: Fan Fiction Character

This is a drawing of one of my fan-fiction characters. Although just so you know I'm going to upload the fan-fiction on fanficnotion.net which does not allow images, so this was mainly for my own amusement. I must say though that I don't have any skin coloured pencils and I can't blend my pencils to get a skin colour. So I had to leave that out.

Oh and the Fanfiction is for an online game called Wizard101, so the colours no the sleeve-less robe is not random. And before anyone asks this character is male, and that is not a dress.

So now that I've said all that. What do you think?
Wizard Character 1.jpg

 

Postby Zjacklee » Fri Apr 12, 2013 12:19 pm

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Hey Nippon,

Good to see you still practice.
One thing I have to say is I really like the hair shape. It's interesting.

As for critique, you kind of messed up the proportions. His legs are too short for starters which makes his arms seem too long if they are. i'm not sure about their length yet.
Next, I have to say that the pose is stiff and boring. you remember the video we sent you once from sycra on how to draw more interesting poses? review it if you have the chance.
And what happened to his hands?
Next if you are drawing manga, it might be a good idea to put some more motion/movement in your clothes. that will help out the general idea.
I won't give further critique on clothes and colour, etc etc since you already have enough to work on for now.

good luck.
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Postby Nipponkage » Fri Apr 12, 2013 12:30 pm

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I see what you mean about the pose being boaring. But this is as I said for my fanfiction, and now that I have a better understanding of how my own character looks I can draw more interesting poses if I want. Also I must of forgot to mention, this is supposed to be a kid between the ages of 10 and 13, and I have no idea how to draw them in terms of proportion, so I tried making the legs shorter, guess I forgot ro do the same with the arms.

 

Postby Zjacklee » Fri Apr 12, 2013 12:43 pm

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Nipponkage wrote:I see what you mean about the pose being boaring. But this is as I said for my fanfiction, and now that I have a better understanding of how my own character looks I can draw more interesting poses if I want. Also I must of forgot to mention, this is supposed to be a kid between the ages of 10 and 13, and I have no idea how to draw them in terms of proportion, so I tried making the legs shorter, guess I forgot ro do the same with the arms.


When you don't know... use reference. search, find out. See! don't guess.

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Postby Nipponkage » Fri Apr 12, 2013 1:01 pm

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Right, okay then. Next time I draw this character, or when I draw his twin sister I'll give it a shot.


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