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Postby Leluach » Tue Jan 29, 2013 6:47 pm

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Subject title: Could you critique my work?

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Dont be shy, i am going to improve like hell for rest of my life so i would like to have advances to improve.
That below picture is my firsth page ever done with 3. steps.

Btw. How i send pictures that they are immidiently visible in my posts?
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Postby alnoth » Tue Jan 29, 2013 10:13 pm

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just attach them. below the text window theres a tab that says "upload attachment". you can upload any image from your computer within 1000x1000 pixels i believe.

 

Postby Zjacklee » Wed Jan 30, 2013 12:39 am

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Hey dude,

welcome to the forum. I see you have a rather personal style already with your drawings.
The first one, I don't have a specific thing to point out as wrong... just that your character seems to be tilted to the left. He doesn't have a steady pose.
the rest is all covered in drapes so it's hard for me to pinpoint body mistakes if there is any. And seeing that your character is more of a cartoon too... there isn't much to be said.

Your line work can be refined. it's pretty rough and sketchy. I would sketch out with pencil, a light one and then make the inking with a pen or fineliner. you can have steadier strokes and a cleaner work if you already know what needs to be drawn.

To your story... I like the idea. I know what you want to say with this little story and I partly agree.
as critique, I find the use of your panels a bit messy though and I would use some more interesting angles. Also, introducing the area of the story is also a good beginning. to make your audience familiarize with the environment. There is some of that missing.

Anyways, keep on making art! and looking forward yo your improvement.
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Postby Total100 » Wed Jan 30, 2013 3:04 am

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Location: in my room. 1 laptop for video another laptop for forum. and a 1 sketchbook for drawing...

wow i REALLY like the design. but i have a problem with the eyes. they look really wrong... it might be a style though
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Postby Ambiguity » Wed Jan 30, 2013 3:11 am

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alnoth wrote:just attach them. below the text window theres a tab that says "upload attachment". you can upload any image from your computer within 1000x1000 pixels i believe.

I edited his post and didn't even notice the question lol.

@Leluach
Highlight the URL of the image and press the "Img" button at the top of the post.

 

Postby Leluach » Wed Jan 30, 2013 1:11 pm

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Thank you for criticing my work. Yes indeed my eyes can look weird. I havent really found style with eyes. I sketched that firsth picture like going crazy and doing with joke, but then i watched: hey this could work and that what happened. I sketched last night many womans pose using refences so i think those pictures arent important to be here? there are many sketches done fast in 3000 4800 pixel window. But yeshh i post other my pictures when i get done them.

 

Postby alnoth » Wed Jan 30, 2013 1:49 pm

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you can put unfinished pieces and sketches in the Sketchbook section - its understood its just doodles there, but if you still want to share it, go ahead.


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