svarn wrote:Well artwise I feel like it's very unpolished, and judging by your sketchbook I know that you can do better.
I'm not really good with lineart myself, but I can tell that you're all over the place with it. There's a lot of lines that don't meet up, or they cross each other and you didn't clean it up afterwards.
Also I feel like this thick ink brush with a lot of variety tends to look pretty amatureish. Since half of the lines go from 9000 to 0.
Also I'd use text bubbles that already exist, rather then drawing them by hand. And I'm not sure why did you write some text by hand if you already had a nice font.
Overall I feel like you are skipping steps in drawing to get on with the story faster. But then by the page 7 we have 2 characters meet up and exchange names. Which makes me wonder if all those frames were really neccesary.
Sorry if it sound harsh, but I hope that it helps.
No problem.Yeah,i'm not very good with lineart.I love thick lineart,so i may try to use brush with less variety.
Unfortunately this is the best i can do,i'm not skipping steps or anything
