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Postby kiwidetective » Sun May 28, 2017 1:00 pm

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Subject title: Competition Entry - Need Feedback!

Hey guys, I'm joining a competition this year that requires me to paint a character depicting 2 opposite emotions.
The emotions I chose were serenity and rage (only serenity in this first pic).
Anyone care to give feedback on this so far?
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Postby Audiazif » Sun May 28, 2017 6:51 pm

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I think the painterly-ness is nice but I think you need to tighten up areas of interest to make things pop more. Also I think the character sinks into the background, you should add some kind of contrast between the bg and the subject. Another thing I see happening is the form is getting lost in places like the cheek, neck, and body. I think the first thing to do is unify the light source. It is hard to tell where the light is coming from because the shading is "spotty". Try for large shapes of light and shadow first and then refine into smaller and more detailed shapes. Another thing that is contributing to the flatness is the fur pattern. It is pretty much the same color throughout the piece. The color should have a more noticeable change when it goes from light to shadow.
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Postby Gryephon » Mon May 29, 2017 2:58 am

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Look, the bottom line is that contrast is important. It helps us artist's articulate our visuals better.

My advice would be go under adjustment levels and beef up the contrast, and try to get to know your histogram
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Postby Mandilor » Mon May 29, 2017 7:13 am

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The edges that separate two objects, such as character from background or chin from neck need to have clean edges.

Could also use some occlusion shadows here and there.

 

Postby ManyTcnj » Wed May 31, 2017 8:06 pm

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Hi Kiwi,

I think the drawing, and the contrast ration/ overall lighting/ colors, are good. I think, however, you could render this WAY more. I thought of Aaron Blaise when I saw this. Take a look at how he renders fur. A combination of painting, and overlays. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LuaMG0_-xWw

In general, starting with a slightly darker value, and then going over top with a slightly lighter value. I started rendering a small section on the cheek. I think this is a great base, and could be punched up a notch.
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Postby ManyTcnj » Wed May 31, 2017 8:07 pm

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Also, stripes a re a great opportunity to show off fur, as they give you multiple silhouette edges.


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