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Postby Nipponkage » Sat May 04, 2013 3:10 pm

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Subject title: Underwater maiden

Can someone give me help here. I'm trying to do a female character floating in water. And I don't think I got the form(?) of the back right. Does anyone have any good reference for something like this (I have no idea what I should search in google)? Oh and also I think I'll change the hand, cause she's supposed to look graceful and looking back it it, it doesn't (with the fingers pointing out and all).
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Postby Nipponkage » Sat May 04, 2013 5:11 pm

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I've tried and fix some of it (I think).
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Postby Zjacklee » Sat May 04, 2013 5:27 pm

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Hi there... I think it's too early to try what you are doing now. The body doesn't even seem female.
your form is very stiff and lacking proper body construction.

I'd suggest you start studying some figure construction and proportions. When you are comfortable with that... go with gesture and anatomy.

one more tip i can give you right about now to avoid doing... is drawing straight sticks for legs. try using curved lines.
Check the type of bends that limbs make. That is REALLY important. lot's of people don't realise this in the beginning but it's a must if you want your figures to look good.

Analytical Week 3 - Student Shape Questions.jpg


Since she is also in the water... the pose should be A lot more loose.

In any case, focus now on practicing those things and draw from reference for awhile to get a good feel of the body and all its curves etc. :P
Good luck and hope any of this helps!

Also for constructing bodies check out http://www.vectology.com/category/anatomy/
(on a side note. someone pay me for all this advertising to vectology! xD :lol: )

Edit: I didn't notice it was you Nippon. lol. thought it was someone new. xD anyways, you got my critique.
Look closely. Can you really See?!

http://zjacklee.deviantart.com/ that's my deviant. ^_^

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Postby Nipponkage » Sat May 04, 2013 5:41 pm

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Yeah I kind of figured it wouldn't look feminine :roll: . Oh ,well I'm guessing I should just stop this piece, huh. I only started it after all because I liked the way Zhong Fenghau piece looked on sycra's live stream vid: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SVOkwd5PSVM @ 0:16:15. And I wanted to do something smiler, but looks like I failed lol.

 

Postby Snakebreath » Sat May 04, 2013 10:50 pm

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Personally I think the pose is too stiff, but that's no reason to quit. Remember the main reason you do art is to express yourself. Just because you don't have the skills of a professional artist yet doesn't mean you shouldn't tackle something your inspired by. Even if it turns out bad, the experience you get from creating that piece is a learning one, and in the end will help you to avoid making similar mistakes in the future. It may even reveal to you what things you need to study more (besides poses ;) ).


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