Submit your artwork for critiques here, or give someone else some helpful criticism or advice on their artwork. Please keep things civil.

Moderators: Ambiguity, SeaQuenchal, Waveloop, imcostalong, virtueone

 

Postby Huglojsk » Thu Apr 25, 2013 7:35 pm

  Huglojsk
Posts: 47
Joined: Thu Apr 25, 2013 7:20 pm

Subject title: Abandoned Desert Village (video critique would be awesome)

I made this one pretty quickly with a pretty loose style but I'm happy with it.
It's my first landscape/environment painting and I would really appreciate some critique.

WasteLand.jpg


Thanks. :D

 

Postby Beazann » Fri Apr 26, 2013 9:09 am

  Beazann
Posts: 7
Joined: Tue Apr 23, 2013 6:49 pm

I'd suggest to make an aerial perspective stronger, and do something with the value of hanging sheets to make it different from the sky. Overall really nice.

 

Postby Fedodika » Fri Apr 26, 2013 11:18 am

User avatar
  Fedodika
Posts: 1091
Joined: Tue Apr 16, 2013 10:53 pm

these colors are really interesting; i'm just not really digging the clouds, maybe give them some sort of texture? Keep it up though, pretty awesome! :D

 

Postby Huglojsk » Sat Apr 27, 2013 2:04 pm

  Huglojsk
Posts: 47
Joined: Thu Apr 25, 2013 7:20 pm

Thanks for the feedback! :)

I was happy with the color choice - yeah, but I will keep in mind to check all values to really make stuff pop. As it was a really loose style I didn't care much about the clouds but I'll think about giving them some texture if I do a more detailed one. :)

If you think about anything else please leave a reply. It's really nice to get some feedback on my work as it improves my painting a lot!

Thanks. :D

 

Postby Zoju » Sat Apr 27, 2013 2:25 pm

User avatar
  Zoju
Posts: 46
Joined: Fri Apr 19, 2013 12:06 am

The water puddles seem off, maybe make them darker. They look somewhat metallic. I'm not sure why would there be water puddles in an abandoned desert town in the first place.
The drying clothes don't look apart from the sky at first glance, maybe push the values a little more. Also, their shadows don't look good, judged by the angle of the sunlight; they should be shaped like a rhombus.
And lastly, I agree that the clouds should have some sort of texture, at least some shading from the sun.
Expanding a canvas a little bit to give more breathing space and more sky to look at could be a good idea, and make the picture feel more lonely and less confined.


Return to Critique This!

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 4 guests