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Postby Tsatalas » Sun Mar 31, 2013 10:27 pm

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Subject title: Critique!! :)

Hi there everyone! This is my first post on the forum and i would Appreciate it if you like to make a critique in some drawings of mine!! :)
Dont go easy on me ( its the only way to get better in this ) Thank you :)
Angel-copy2.jpg
My first angel :)

 

Postby Waveloop » Sun Mar 31, 2013 11:13 pm

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Welcome man, hope you have fun with the gang around here.

It's ironic, I'm doing an angel piece too :D

So about your's. Man I really like intensity it gives, I like the layout and composition too. Just think it's a shame things are so blurry. I would try and define things a bit better. And the wings, I feel like it should have more feathers, and ones that are floating around, somehow they feel really thick and heavy, I would try and make them more light and thin.

It's got potential, but still needs work in my opinion

Keep it up

 

Postby Tsatalas » Mon Apr 01, 2013 12:43 pm

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Thank u for a worming welcome! :)
Well yeah i know its quite rough and yeah about the feathers i knew that something was
wrong about them but could not see exactly what it was!
Thank you so much! I'll be waiting to see the results of your work :)
Thanks again!! :D

 

Postby Tsatalas » Mon Apr 01, 2013 1:04 pm

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here s a more comic(ish) approach!!
dwarf03.jpg
After The Hobbyt movie :)
hulk.jpg
Traditional

 

Postby Zjacklee » Mon Apr 01, 2013 1:53 pm

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Not bad man. I can see the potential. Just work a bit more on your constructions, but all in all... not bad. You will see more as you gain experience so that's alright.
welcome by the way!
Look closely. Can you really See?!

http://zjacklee.deviantart.com/ that's my deviant. ^_^

https://www.facebook.com/Trplerainbow My fanpage.

 

Postby Tsatalas » Mon Apr 01, 2013 2:10 pm

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Zjacklee wrote:Not bad man. I can see the potential. Just work a bit more on your constructions, but all in all... not bad. You will see more as you gain experience so that's alright.
welcome by the way!

Thank you so much!! :)
This forum is so helpfull i wish i could see it earlier !!!!
I ll try do my best!! :D

 

Postby Evan » Mon Apr 01, 2013 4:52 pm

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awsome work wish I could give you some advice, but I'm kinda new to this art stuff starting back up after a ten year break. keep up the good work vary inspirational.

 

Postby Tsatalas » Mon Apr 01, 2013 7:13 pm

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Evan wrote:awsome work wish I could give you some advice, but I'm kinda new to this art stuff starting back up after a ten year break. keep up the good work vary inspirational.

ThnYou my friend for these good words!! They realy mean something for me cuz Im in the same position with u, almost 10 years brake!!
So i just got back in the last 2 years but its like my Grandfather used to say "If you let go something away it lets u go too"!!! Wise word!! ;)
This time we must push our selfs more then ever !!! Tnx again! :)

 

Postby Ambiguity » Thu Apr 04, 2013 11:17 am

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Sycra just uploaded a video critique of your angel ^_^:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oXC11GnhHVk

 

Postby Tsatalas » Thu Apr 04, 2013 3:13 pm

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Ambiguity wrote:Sycra just uploaded a video critique of your angel ^_^:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oXC11GnhHVk

Thanky for telling me !! :)

 

Postby Tsatalas » Tue Apr 30, 2013 12:09 am

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Hey ppl !! Just finished this piece!!
Happy to hear what u think!! :)
I always wanted to do something scary!
haunted-tree-final2.jpg

 

Postby Fedodika » Tue Apr 30, 2013 1:14 am

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I think the style your going for isn't working for me. Like the shadow under the tree seems as if it would work in like a comic book style, but the realistic look the picture has going on doesn't meld with it you know? the value of the shadow is just so samey, samey, but your lines and strokes are pretty good. Also the background is kind of boring and doesnt offer too much as far as levels, just the slope towards the treeline...

Idk, it looks okay, but that is just what i can say at first glance, i hope this helps!

 

Postby virtueone » Tue Apr 30, 2013 1:37 am

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Some quick opinions on that last painting...

It needs more color variation, there's too much local color.
It could use more texture (unless you prefer that smooth look).
The transition from the foreground to background seems a bit abrupt.
Is the tree in motion? How are those birds so calm? Lol.

Overall, I like it, nice work. ;)

 

Postby Tsatalas » Tue Apr 30, 2013 9:18 am

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Well tnx for the reply & a good eye view guys!! The image has alot of issues i know & your right about each and every one of them & i can see them too!!
But what can u tell me about composition coz thats where i was trying to focus on!!!
Thanks again all of you for some good art lessons!!! :)

 

Postby GuyWithFewWords » Tue Apr 30, 2013 11:22 am

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Here's my rendition. Observe what's working for you.

http://youtu.be/g1ZsXBOymII
There are few things that do not require words to understand. Art is one.

 

Postby Fedodika » Tue Apr 30, 2013 3:07 pm

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Yes^ That works very well; he expanded the illustration and made the colors and values less samey samey on the tree. Also his adding of the red lights made for more interesting colors. i wish i was dat gud :lol:

 

Postby Zjacklee » Tue Apr 30, 2013 7:26 pm

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this guywithfewwords is something else.
Nice critique.
Look closely. Can you really See?!

http://zjacklee.deviantart.com/ that's my deviant. ^_^

https://www.facebook.com/Trplerainbow My fanpage.

 

Postby Tsatalas » Wed May 01, 2013 12:27 am

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GuyWithFewWords wrote:Here's my rendition. Observe what's working for you.

http://youtu.be/g1ZsXBOymII

There are no words to describe this but one....
"Thank You" man this is really nice work you did there!!
I can see now what Virtue & Fedo where talking about & i'll try to put it to good use!!


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