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Postby WhosNext » Fri Mar 22, 2013 12:29 pm

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Subject title: A Quick Sketch...

New to the forum and thought I'd say hello to everyone and introduce myself with a quick sketch for you all to look over and critique :-)

This is part of a run of 'Unknown Sketches' i'm doing as a way of getting used to digital sketching from scratch on the Wacom tablet, make a few marks on a blank canvas and see what starts to appear. Its a way of opening myself up and freeing away from the confines of work!

All feedback is welcome!

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Postby Aangkat » Sat Mar 23, 2013 3:13 pm

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I can't find any critique, because this is a quick sketch ^_^
Nice one BTW! it is really good for a quick :D
Be sure to put your art in the sketchbook forum also :D

 

Postby WhosNext » Mon Mar 25, 2013 10:35 am

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Hello and thank you Aangkat, I'll have a look at putting bit in the Sketchbook section when I have a few more bits down...
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Postby Zjacklee » Mon Mar 25, 2013 1:25 pm

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Hi there, welcome around.

If I would have to critique I would have to aim at the "3D" ness of this. It seems kinda flat and distorted somehow. Even though I know which basic shapes you are suggesting the robot is made out of, I can't tell that it really has those shapes.
You might want to redo your light and darkness. ( choose a lightsource as a start and then really think of your subject in matter of top, sides and front. Where will the light reach and where won't it reach? Don't be afraid of making shadows too big. )

If I look at the figure too... it seems as if it's body is pointing one way. ( the front of it)
while it's limbs are pointing a different direction for the thing to go.( Looking at it's legs and arms and head )
That's a really weird twist if you ask me.
Try to envision it's form.

Hope this helps. ;)
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Postby WhosNext » Mon Mar 25, 2013 5:09 pm

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Zjacklee,

Thanks for the comments, I could indeed up the contrast on the high and lowlights, I'll hit that harder on the next one, really make things clear for the viewer. The twist of the body (for me feels right) it is a little exaggerated, but this was to add a little more movement and dynamism to the pose. The upper body is fixed and a solid unit in the quick design and only twist as the flexible grey connection to the hips, which might push this a little more round. The robot is running fast and leaping forward (as tho jumping through the square boarder), with a big leap the upper torso will twist with the leading arm towards the leading foot/leg to keep the body moving straight direction while in air.

Maybe I went a little to far with it?
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Postby pseudome » Mon Mar 25, 2013 6:52 pm

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WhosNext wrote: The twist of the body (for me feels right) it is a little exaggerated, but this was to add a little more movement and dynamism to the pose. The upper body is fixed and a solid unit in the quick design and only twist as the flexible grey connection to the hips, which might push this a little more round. The robot is running fast and leaping forward (as tho jumping through the square boarder), with a big leap the upper torso will twist with the leading arm towards the leading foot/leg to keep the body moving straight direction while in air.

i had the same impression as Zjacklee tbh - if i look at some reference pictures of runners, i notice that the hips' orientation is the same as the legs. so, if you have the closest leg bending forward, the hips should have the same direction, otherwise youre looking at a hip joint with far too many degrees of liberty. which IS possible, but it warrants a curved, stretched out joint, maybe a spring? in any case, the main twist point ought to be between torso and hips imo

cool sketch overall, are you using your tablet in mouse or pen mode btw?

 

Postby WhosNext » Tue Mar 26, 2013 12:59 pm

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I think I see where you're both coming from now and this shows I should focus more on my shading to really depict the form better! Plus add a little more curve to top edge of the hip to accentuate the form.

The top section of the hip part (on the design) is cylindrical and not oval like the torso of the robot :-S

Pleased to hear you like the sketch tho, I'm using a Wacom tablet and Photoshop, I'm doing these as ways of getting used to digital drawing from scratch which is new to me, this was my 3rd play at it.
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Postby Zjacklee » Tue Mar 26, 2013 7:00 pm

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one more tip... if you aren't doing it already, try mirroring your work. It will often reveal things you as the artist can't see anymore because you have been working for too long on it.
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Postby WhosNext » Tue Mar 26, 2013 7:46 pm

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Zjacklee wrote:one more tip... if you aren't doing it already, try mirroring your work. It will often reveal things you as the artist can't see anymore because you have been working for too long on it.


Owww, nice! I like that :-) Taking that one into my professional work as well....
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Postby marvel57 » Tue Mar 26, 2013 7:55 pm

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Whos- nice sketch, you can see you have some skill. I believe I'd like to see more :ugeek:

 

Postby WhosNext » Fri Apr 12, 2013 7:30 pm

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Not sure if you'd be interested but I have been posting videos of my unknown sketches and finally posted the video for this sketch, thought you might like to hae a look at how this random sketch developed into this....

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cc0Kl2Kj ... IbmOyGJnWt
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