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Postby 1mannwolfpak » Mon Jan 28, 2013 8:38 pm

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Subject title: critique my digital painting/portrait attempt from reference

this is my first post and I'm unsure of what exactly to ask for critique on in this forum. So here's my digital painting attempt, any critique that leads me in the right direction and makes my digital painting better will be greatly appreciated.

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Postby Total100 » Tue Jan 29, 2013 2:04 am

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well first off i see that the image is a under view. we see the bottom of his nose and so on. on your painting your view is front view. so yours is front view, his is up view.

also you need some more light tones. for example look at his top left forehead. in the image its very light. almost white. in yours its a bit more bland and dull.
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Postby Zjacklee » Tue Jan 29, 2013 12:35 pm

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Hey dude,

I think you are seeing but you aren't really looking. I agree with what Total100 has said so far.
It seems as if you are drawing what you think there should be there and not how it really looks there.
Examples would be... there is a very clear shadow over his nose... why didn't you paint it?
his eyes appear allot darker in the picture that you can barely see his pupils... still you chose to clearly paint them.
you drew a front view instead of a slightly low angle viewpoint.
There is barely any hair on the side of his head, but you have a very clear thick bit of painted hair.
the distance in between the eyes is also way to wide. It's more then one eye distance. check it in your reference and compare.
I can continue with a couple of more examples... but are you getting what I mean?

( I assume you are trying to paint exactly what's there right? )

Now if I were to look at only the painting... It's not a bad painting buddy. except for the little distance in between the eyes that made the face slightly wide,
I think it looks good. It could use some more definition, darker values and lighter values to show more depth.

Keep it up in any case dude. ;)
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Postby Waveloop » Tue Jan 29, 2013 1:12 pm

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You should tackle composition and value for it to pop... cuz no offense dude, but it is pretty boring despite being decently painted... right now it looks like a sticker... has no dept to it... and it is uninteresting.
put some background value to pop it up... change the lay out, and add some stuff from your own mind to make it more interesting, like draw some of random placed hairs on his head and face, exaggerate his expression, or the shadows on his face... something

but that's just me

keep it up

 

Postby Ambiguity » Tue Jan 29, 2013 2:13 pm

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Waveloop wrote:You should tackle composition and value for it to pop... cuz no offense dude, but it is pretty boring despite being decently painted... right now it looks like a sticker... has no dept to it... and it is uninteresting.
put some background value to pop it up... change the lay out, and add some stuff from your own mind to make it more interesting, like draw some of random placed hairs on his head and face, exaggerate his expression, or the shadows on his face... something

but that's just me

keep it up

Normally I'd agree, but I think he's doing this more as a study for himself than an actual "portfolio piece".

 

Postby Waveloop » Tue Jan 29, 2013 5:44 pm

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Ambiguity wrote:Normally I'd agree, but I think he's doing this more as a study for himself than an actual "portfolio piece".


even better... I would list those things in "to study" in a "portrait attempt from reference" like the title says. And I don't see the harm in making things look... better.
But more importantly it just tickles my OCD to see it like that :D
I feel you though ;)

 

Postby marvel57 » Tue Jan 29, 2013 10:39 pm

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It looks like your subject has changed races and gained weight, was that a goal for this drawing? Use your own eyes to compare, if you want an exact copy, keep working :D :ugeek:

 

Postby Zjacklee » Wed Jan 30, 2013 12:26 am

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marvel57 wrote:It looks like your subject has changed races and gained weight, was that a goal for this drawing? Use your own eyes to compare, if you want an exact copy, keep working :D :ugeek:


Hahaha! good comment!
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Postby Williham24 » Thu Jan 31, 2013 12:35 am

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marvel57 wrote:It looks like your subject has changed races and gained weight, was that a goal for this drawing? Use your own eyes to compare, if you want an exact copy, keep working :D :ugeek:


He reminds me of a bearded Biggie Smalls haha!

On the beard front, the beard in the reference looks very kind of fluffy (probably because it's curly) and so does the hair, and yours looks a little flat, maybe that's just me anyway :? But yeah, it does look like you aren't really copying the image very well, you should spend twice as long looking at your reference than you do looking at your drawing, at least that's what the life drawing person said haha :lol:
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Postby Ambiguity » Thu Jan 31, 2013 1:04 am

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Williham24 wrote:you should spend twice as long looking at your reference than you do looking at your drawing, at least that's what the life drawing person said haha :lol:

I've heard that too, are you talking about Matt Archambault?

 

Postby Williham24 » Thu Jan 31, 2013 9:09 pm

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Oh no haha, when I did life drawing outside of school the woman said that, mind you I still sucked at it :oops:
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Postby Ambiguity » Fri Feb 01, 2013 2:10 am

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Williham24 wrote:Oh no haha, when I did life drawing outside of school the woman said that, mind you I still sucked at it :oops:

Ah, I guess it's just a common thing for life drawing teachers to say then.

 

Postby perkexpert » Sat Feb 02, 2013 2:38 pm

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Hi Wolfman,

Good start there, not much to add to the other posts, some points: Stay away from the airbrush and just keep working and observing. I did a lightly caricatured version of the reference (you?)
and tried to go for a clear value approach from the start. I stop now, as i start getting carried away :) Theres a lot to do still, but i hope i can get my points accross: Spend more time on values and forget about the shirt details.
Keep it up man!
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