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Postby Meteorman05 » Thu Oct 04, 2012 4:12 pm

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Subject title: Could you please critique this - a video would be great

Just getting in to drawing, let me know what you guys think! It would be great if you could use this in a video, Sycra!

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Postby Ambiguity » Thu Oct 04, 2012 6:56 pm

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Hmm, I think your shading is a bit too splotchy in places, it's not really doing a good job describing the form. For instance her forehead looks like it has a dent in it.


P.S. I'm a big fan of Warren Louw too :).

 

Postby Waveloop » Thu Oct 04, 2012 8:42 pm

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I like it a lot... though I agree that the shading could use a bit tunning

 

Postby Meteorman05 » Thu Oct 04, 2012 9:15 pm

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Haha yes, this is a repaint of warrenlouw's painting.

Thanks for the advice on the shading, I think I agree.

 

Postby Fenix_N » Fri Oct 05, 2012 5:03 am

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She looks very pretty. But I agree with Ambi on the shading.

 

Postby Otakatt » Fri Oct 05, 2012 5:50 am

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The shape of her left eye seems off. Both eyes seem to be the same size and shape, but when one is further away like that, the shape and size will change somewhat. I'm bad at explaining so...
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Postby Waveloop » Fri Oct 05, 2012 7:06 am

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Otakatt wrote:The shape of her left eye seems off. Both eyes seem to be the same size and shape, but when one is further away like that, the shape and size will change somewhat. I'm bad at explaining so...



this is very true... er left eye needs a littel rounding...just sorten the left hedge of the eye and you´re fine... a andI would do this has wel... change the ligthing on her forehead... and her rigth cheek... is seem like she is shewing on something... but it´s a really nice wo´rk.... very smoth and apealng to the the eye... keep them roling dude... you´re in the rigth path
cheers

 

Postby alnoth » Fri Oct 05, 2012 7:30 am

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wave, whats happening to you? your posts seem more and more portuguese... :D i have to read it out loud to understand all of it.

 

Postby Waveloop » Fri Oct 05, 2012 8:13 pm

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Damn...! :lol:
It' this freaking iPad and the automatic correction, it was set up to Vulcan or something :lol:
Sorry about that... It was really late and I didn't check my spelling... But hopefully the message got through :roll:

 

Postby Meteorman05 » Fri Oct 05, 2012 8:34 pm

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I got the message, wave, thanks. I agree that the shading is a bit splotchy, but I'm having trouble seeing a problem with the eye...?

Thanks for the feedback, guys!

 

Postby Waveloop » Fri Oct 05, 2012 9:18 pm

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Meteorman05 wrote:I got the message, wave, thanks. I agree that the shading is a bit splotchy, but I'm having trouble seeing a problem with the eye...?

Thanks for the feedback, guys!



something like this... toke the liberty of change it... hope thats ok... it´s very subtle

just rounded the edge of the far eye... and changed a littel of the shading giving her a littel smile... just my way of seeing it...

cheers
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Postby Meteorman05 » Mon Oct 08, 2012 6:28 am

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Waveloop wrote:something like this... toke the liberty of change it... hope thats ok... it´s very subtle

just rounded the edge of the far eye... and changed a littel of the shading giving her a littel smile... just my way of seeing it...

cheers


Oh, hey, thanks! I was looking at the near eye, not the far one. I see what you mean now. Great changes, looks good!

 

Postby sgtmikey101 » Tue Oct 09, 2012 5:41 am

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wow this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

Postby Fanmade » Tue Oct 09, 2012 9:54 pm

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I love this portrait :D
I didn't even notice the error at the eye, but correcting it really did improve the picture even more.
Will we see more in the future from you? I hope so! :)

 

Postby Meteorman05 » Wed Oct 10, 2012 4:17 am

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Thanks guys! As I get better, I'll post more.


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